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carried away

October 11, 2011

carried away

i now cannot say that this
is not what i cannot say

i keep quiet
carefully
counting out
the contrast
of continuous quietness.

— Zumwalt  (06/1991)

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1991, C, short poems, Zumwalt

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  1. willowdot21's avatar
    willowdot21 said:
    October 11, 2011 at 8:19 pm

    SSSSSSSH! someone will hear!!

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  2. poetofmidnight's avatar
    poetofmidnight said:
    October 12, 2011 at 12:08 am

    The alliteration in your poem is amazing! I haven’t seen it very often in poems that I’ve read. I’ve been doing some reading through you’re blog and I want to nominate you for the Versatile Blogger Award. =).

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  3. Betty Hayes Albright's avatar
    Betty Hayes Albright said:
    October 12, 2011 at 12:45 am

    “…counting out the contrast of continuous quietness.” Nice last lines!

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    Poetry & Icecream said:
    October 12, 2011 at 7:09 am

    Excellent alliteration! I love theses lines “counting out the contrast of continuous quietness.” Beautifully written 🙂

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  5. zumpoems's avatar
    zumpoems said:
    October 12, 2011 at 8:31 pm

    willowdot21, poetofmidnight, Betty and Poetry & Icecream,

    Thanks so much for reading and commenting.

    it seems appropriate: the hard consonants and the struggle “i now cannot say that this
    is not what i cannot say” with the assumption of being quiet

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    abichica said:
    October 13, 2011 at 4:19 pm

    woooowwww!!! excellent rendition.. i absolutely love love love it.. 😀

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  7. skyraftwanderer's avatar
    skyraftwanderer said:
    October 20, 2011 at 1:34 am

    Love the repeating C’s. Excellently deployed.

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  8. zumpoems's avatar
    zumpoems said:
    October 20, 2011 at 9:22 pm

    skyraftwanderer,

    Thanks for reading this and older posts and for your comments!

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